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Do you believe those movies?
That every move you make I mirror sub-consciously.
The classic attempts of falling into sleep in separate worlds,
Or at least different parts of this city.
It doesn’t work,
The thoughts never crumble under tired minds,
They’re in overload and bodies are stirring restlessly,
Lie back and breathe this breath deeply.

Do you wake up only to find that the situation’s unchanged?
Stand under the shower that beats down hard on you,
No morning birds except the soft, sweet melody of a heartbeat,
It belongs to the girl you scribbled over in blue.
Enough to make you slip on the soap?
Cos it smells and sounds just like she’s here.

Stumble onto the street,
With that ‘just out of bed’ look,
I call that making an effort.
On the bus I’m listening to the soundtrack without a hook,
You’re not famous and life isn’t airbrushed.

We’ll miss each other by seconds,
Fate has a way of fucking things up for us two,
No freeze frames to prevent the disaster,
So I’ll be oblivious and so will you.

Then as if by magic,
We catch eyes across the room,
Secretly I’ve been here before and it won’t play our way,
But for now i'll hold onto this walk under the moon.
Over a coffee,
You whisper into the steam so your words evaporate away,
Far from the bitter cold of outside.
I re-write the script for our film,
Everyday.
©2005-2009 ~bemybaby
:iconbemybaby:

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just some thoughts i get about one of those films where loves missed by a matter of minutes haha just refering it into my own life i guess...

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:iconunknownemo:
We’ll miss each other by seconds,
Fate has a way of fucking things up for us two,
No freeze frames to prevent the disaster,
So I’ll be oblivious and so will you.

i like these lines,i will never know why tho;)

Stumble onto the street,
With that ‘just out of bed’ look,

nice n casual.good.

i like lots of the poem...the shower ssection, n basically what it's about.
nice work.
as always.

good ending aswell this time:)

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You said you like to hear the rain sometime...:(
Dying in the dust of you.
...
Everything i've wanted.is laying on the blueprint.
:icondomi-:
this is very
very
suprisingly lyrical
(not suprisingly because i didnt expect you to write lyrically, but rather suprising because it kind of.. creeps out.. its not very noticeable at first, but the last two stanzas are so much so that its hard not to notice)
your writing flows wonderfully and this is such a soft sweet sentimental piece that it almost breaks my heart.. and yet.. warm and fuzzies felt all through it.
:)
and its such a perfect little portrayal of exactly what goes on in the movies..
you writing is simply wonderful

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98% of teenagers follow the crowd. If you're one of the 2% that doesnt, copy and paste this into your sig.
:iconbemybaby:
thanks craig :) yeh i the idea was from just a certain experience.. moment of madness that sort of thing haha. Thankyou for quoting its feels more of a personal comment :blowkiss:

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I was just a young girl then......never loving since then
:iconbemybaby:
Thankyou (: it felt like writing a song actually. It kinda did break my heart to write too but also made me smile so and im so pleased those emotions rub off on the reader. pleased you enjoyed!

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I was just a young girl then......never loving since then
:icondomi-:
(=

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98% of teenagers follow the crowd. If you're one of the 2% that doesnt, copy and paste this into your sig.
:icongrimdiskord:
wow thats beautiful definitly a fav


klubs i kreate kaos with




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We are the proud parents of a daughter who hasn't been knocked up yet... and a son who hasn't shot any of his classmates yet, but he does sell drugs to your honour student...
:iconjiminyfiddle:
That is.. once again.. absolutely awesome.. another fav.. perhaps a watch too.. yes.. go on then...
:iconbemybaby:
haha you spoil me thanks glad you liked :)

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I was just a young girl then......never loving since then
:iconunknownemo:
just read this one again,
:):)
its reallyREALLY good!

:)

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i write the letters,
you read the words.
It's simple really.

I don't write poetry. I write stories that ryme.

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